[OzzyC]

I guess this is the right forum...

So yeah... I wrote this. I kinda had a train of thought going, but I'm not sure everything connects well...

I'm open to anything you may think.

To sigh knowing the truth
or rejoice in false hope
often pondered
rarely answered

Let facts flow forth
ignorance has no place in me
truth is what I desire
truth is what I need

No more hiding the pain
don't be afraid to show you feel
let it show
let it be known

I see the wounds
I see the scars
let's fix them
healing for the hurt

This may hurt but-
no, it will
the truth hurts
hiding it hurts worse

One step at a time
what ails you
what is your demon
what plagues you

The sickness made manifest
show your symptoms
tell of your torturous traits
sedative to kill the pain

Numb
unaware
blissful
content

Life returns
as dos pain
worse from lingering
the cycle goes unbroken

Back to where we were
what's wrong
where does it hurt
what happens when I do this

We've found your cure-
no
too much
too hard

Maybe later
increase the dose
kill the pain
let me live

Taking over
thoughts dim
pain ceases

A sudden awakening
worse then before
let me heal you
we know your fix

It won't be easy
difficulties may arise
but you'll be better for it
if you want it...

[Lenanshee]

Sounds alright to me, it's funny how theres always a way to link anything to anything so i wouldn't worry about that.

[The Dark Wolf]

That's actually pretty good, Ozzy. It has a terrific flow and balance to it, almost like a story. Keeps you reading.

I'm not much for the "Pain" type of lyrical device (too much Korn in my young emotional diet ), but it works well in this case. Reminds me more of say... 'Comfortably Numb', than something Korn would do, and far more inventive.


I say - Nice job!

[OzzyC]

Awesome

I totally even forgot I posted that.

I'm not usually a writer, but once in a while I come up with something on paper like this- the last thing I had done before it everything was written backwards on the wrong side of the paper.

Give me a reason
A reason to stay
So I might remain
For one more day

You need me for this
You need me to thrive
I need to live
I need you to try

Try to learn
There's so much you need to know
Try to practice
Your execution is subpar

You need me
I need you-
To be what I know you can be
To see what could become

Refix your gaze
Shallow sighted eyes
Left blind to your surroundings.

Hurry now
Refocus yourself
The sun is soon to rise
You must lead yourself now

I can't stay much longer
You must find the path
I pray you stay safe

Inquiry as to your path
Lost in a dangerous place
Your senses betray you

Light is dark
Warmth is cold
Pain is comfort
Fear is temptation

I've come to save you
Save you from those lying eyes
Your refusal reaffirms previous assumptions

Let me guide you

I take your hand in mine and make my leave

Stopped short

You haven't moved

Then I ask myself in hushed tones
Can I carry her
Nay- the journey is too long
We'd both be lost

Sunset is near to break
I must go now
Pray you find the way
I will not return

[OzzyC]

The bumpzorz.

[Mattmc74]

That was pretty cool! Nice work

[OzzyC]

Thanks.

[OzzyC]

Another one I just wrote...

*Now with 50% more Tool references.

So beautiful and enticing
Delightful and tempting

Lifetimes could be spent describing your beauty
But alas-
The darkness enshrouds you

Eyes dilated
The light blinds you
Step back into darkness

The stench of mold encapsulates your place of hiding
Walls will crumble
You will be left with nothing
Light will again penetrate your soul
You will have no shelter
There is no hiding

But that time is yet to come

Your shelter smoldering
No saving it now
Turn your eyes to what is-
What always has been

But that time is yet to come.

You've got your head down
You've got your eyes closed
You look so pitiful now

See the light now and relieve your suffering
Knowing your misery brings no pleasure

Your mind betrays you
Lies to you
Traps you
Slays you

But that time is yet to come

Look to the light
There is comfort for you here

And there you are still

You've got your head down
You've got your eyes closed
You look so pitiful now

But that time is soon to come

Smoldering ash engulfs your place of hiding
Your walls crumble
You are lef with nothing
Light will again penetrate your soul
You have no shelter
There is no hiding

And there you are still

You've got your head down
You've got your eyes closed
You look so pitiful now

Your body encrusted with ash
Breath heavy with toxins
Hair singed and matted
Clothes frayed and burnt

You are left with nothing

And here again you must choose
My Evil Angel